Songs of Harmony/Songs of Discord

[Ziggy and Angelbaby]

Perhaps that's precisely what's troubling me...it lacks precision. It's trying to condense a too large a whirlwind of sensations into words too general and too few to truly contain them. Ugh, it's quite the labor imagining producing anything tenable out of this. It's probably more a product of the fancy than of any properly deployed poetics.

There's nothing objectively wrong with it. No poem is perfect, but poetry needn't be perfect. Move on to the next piece. And the next. Maybe you'll like this one more later; or maybe you'll have a moment of inspiration that allows you to tie it all together with unexpected ease.