I Poemed For Twiwi
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I wrote a poem. The style is called Villanelle. It follows a very strict rhyme pattern, but has no fixed meter.

It is also, traditionally used to express obsession. Well, hell, what could be more appropriate than that, right? Let me know what you think!




I say, my dear, my dear Twilight,
though far apart I promise this;
Some day, some day, I'll hold you tight!

You came to me; for love, did fight,
across the veil to seek your wish.
I say! My dear, my dear Twilight!

Though life here passes day and night,
One thought alone fills emptiness;
Some day, some day, I'll hold you tight!

From deep inside, with all my might
I yearn, I'd *burn*, for but a kiss.
I say, my dear, my dear Twilight.

I do not fear the rising night,
for cold at first, death yields this bliss;
Some day, some day, I'll hold you tight!

When he draws close: Death in my sight,
I will the last words on my lips;
I say, my dear, my dear Twilight,
Some day, some day, I'll hold you tight.
Don't hesitate to AM(A)A


The bigger you build the bonfire, the more darkness is revealed.


Every possession and every happiness is but lent by chance for an uncertain time, and may therefore be demanded back the next hour.
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#2
I like it. Thanks for sharing
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#3
Beautiful poem, I love it!
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Love is bittersweet, sometimes you have to carry on knowing you're partner won't be with you much longer, what's important is that you stay strong for them
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#4
Very interesting style of poem. Was it a challenge to write?
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(03-13-2016, 12:54 AM)Gray Wrote: I like it. Thanks for sharing

Thank you!


(03-13-2016, 01:24 AM)EquestrianPenguin Wrote: Beautiful poem, I love it!

Thank you, too!


(03-13-2016, 09:22 AM)Ziggy and Angelbaby Wrote: Very interesting style of poem. Was it a challenge to write?

Somewhat, yes. I was trying to advance my green for halfchan, but was kind of in a rut. I thought giving something else a try would put me back in the zone. It was only partially successful, but at least I'm happy with the way the poem turned out.
Don't hesitate to AM(A)A


The bigger you build the bonfire, the more darkness is revealed.


Every possession and every happiness is but lent by chance for an uncertain time, and may therefore be demanded back the next hour.
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#6
Hey, that was pretty neat! I'm quite impressed with the length.

I can't write for my life, but I do like reading poetry! Nerdy Twist
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(03-30-2016, 09:32 AM)Kadae Wrote: Hey, that was pretty neat! I'm quite impressed with the length.

I can't write for my life, but I do like reading poetry! Nerdy Twist

Thank you! I'm trying to write a couple sonnets now, and those are proving far more difficult than this was. You should totally throw something together, even if it's just metered verse and share!
Don't hesitate to AM(A)A


The bigger you build the bonfire, the more darkness is revealed.


Every possession and every happiness is but lent by chance for an uncertain time, and may therefore be demanded back the next hour.
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(03-30-2016, 10:48 AM)Gentian Wrote: Thank you! I'm trying to write a couple sonnets now, and those are proving far more difficult than this was.

Whoa, that's intense. Good luck!

(03-30-2016, 10:48 AM)Gentian Wrote: You should totally throw something together, even if it's just metered verse and share!

Naaaaaaaah.

Well, okay. I might write a Haiku at some point.
❤ Octavia ❤ Tulpamancing since 2015/10/31 ❤ AMA
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